Rinafera Woxwitty III
Ret. War Commander
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Head Boundary Guardian && Retired War Commander
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Feb 19, 2007 23:03:00 GMT -5
Post by Rinafera Woxwitty III on Feb 19, 2007 23:03:00 GMT -5
The breeze cools my warm feelings, my heart resounding as my sword ships through the air, I try not to kill, To blow fatally, I wouldn't dare. Why slay an armless enemy? Why kill a helpless foe, Some people disregard guidelines, Some people can act so low. I would not sleep, if my heart filled with regret, but that is my life, and I wish the weasel and I never met. As he sprawled out on the ground, I stepped upon him and thrusted my sword into his body, But I wish I had known, he had a wife and a daughter named Dotty. I will get redemption, I will be redeemed for this terrible feat, My heart fills with mercy, and my emotions break like a wet sheet. I will redeem, I will live to the Code, I will save, with good memories my heart will load. My quest begins, and my sword hangs at my side...
Its kinda about me, and my adventure with DAB and alike. But I think I wrote it well, what do ya'll think?
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Commander Marie and Will
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Meet the Commander: Champion of GOM's Second Sparring Tournament!
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Feb 19, 2007 23:12:09 GMT -5
Post by Commander Marie and Will on Feb 19, 2007 23:12:09 GMT -5
Very interesting. Very dramatic. ^^ I like it.
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Rinafera Woxwitty III
Ret. War Commander
Head Boundary Guardian
Head Boundary Guardian && Retired War Commander
Posts: 696
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Poem
Feb 19, 2007 23:19:06 GMT -5
Post by Rinafera Woxwitty III on Feb 19, 2007 23:19:06 GMT -5
Thanks! What is your rating for out of ten?
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Commander Marie and Will
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Head Warrior^#black%5Fstar
Meet the Commander: Champion of GOM's Second Sparring Tournament!
Posts: 967
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Feb 20, 2007 17:02:01 GMT -5
Post by Commander Marie and Will on Feb 20, 2007 17:02:01 GMT -5
Hmm... 7.5 XD
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Feb 20, 2007 22:33:55 GMT -5
Post by Songwind and Brawn Oakbrush. on Feb 20, 2007 22:33:55 GMT -5
I really couldn't get a rythym. I like the words though, so you can have a 7.
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Feb 23, 2007 15:14:37 GMT -5
Post by Tasna and Willowtail Riverend on Feb 23, 2007 15:14:37 GMT -5
Pretty good Rinafera. I say 7.5. Hey. I've got an idea. Why not try a few limericks?
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Rinafera Woxwitty III
Ret. War Commander
Head Boundary Guardian
Head Boundary Guardian && Retired War Commander
Posts: 696
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Poem
Feb 24, 2007 0:51:11 GMT -5
Post by Rinafera Woxwitty III on Feb 24, 2007 0:51:11 GMT -5
Limericks? *sits in stupid gaze.*
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Feb 24, 2007 9:02:18 GMT -5
Post by Tasna and Willowtail Riverend on Feb 24, 2007 9:02:18 GMT -5
*Tasna crosses her arms* And what may I ask is so wrong with limericks?
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Rinafera Woxwitty III
Ret. War Commander
Head Boundary Guardian
Head Boundary Guardian && Retired War Commander
Posts: 696
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Feb 24, 2007 10:33:35 GMT -5
Post by Rinafera Woxwitty III on Feb 24, 2007 10:33:35 GMT -5
I mean I don't know what they are... XD
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Feb 24, 2007 14:10:42 GMT -5
Post by Tasna and Willowtail Riverend on Feb 24, 2007 14:10:42 GMT -5
Oh... Well, a limerick is a five line poem. The first, second and fifth lines rhyme with one word. And the third and fourth lines rhyme with a different word. Limericks are supposed to be humorous.
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Rinafera Woxwitty III
Ret. War Commander
Head Boundary Guardian
Head Boundary Guardian && Retired War Commander
Posts: 696
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Poem
Feb 24, 2007 14:22:52 GMT -5
Post by Rinafera Woxwitty III on Feb 24, 2007 14:22:52 GMT -5
Ah, I see.
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